Progress moves slowly. I've completed a third draft for this first story, which mostly addressed problems I had with the opening sequence. It's a tough spot, because it has little to do withh the rest of the story, but is meant to serve as an introduction to Ellie and her assistant Henry. The problem I had (and continue to have) with this sequence is that I simply failed to capture who these characters are. A problem which arises, I suspect, from the fact that I myself am not sure who these characters are. But I know that the way they're currently presented in the third draft opening isn't consistent with the way they're presented in the rest of the third draft (which was really just the rest of the second draft copy/pasted into place with the pages renumbered). Also, the tone set up in the most recent opening is far more dynamic and 'pulp'-y than the rest of the older material. So, yes, I'm going back *again* to rewrite the opening. I'm only a couple pages in at this point, but I'm already far happier with the characterization I'm presenting now. And I will continue on from here, rewriting as much of the rest of the story as I have to in order to keep them consistent. But I'm not planning to let the further rewriting delay my beginning drawing the opening sequence. Once it's complete I intend to at least lay down some rough layout pencils. In the meantime, it's back to the keyboard!

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